Stanley: Baby I'm sorry about last night
Stella: It's okay
Stanley: I didn't mean for it get out of control, I had been drinking you know what I'm like when I've had one to many.
Stella: I know, these things happen.
Stanley: I didn't mean to hurt you intentionally, everything happened so quickly.
Stella: Stanley, I understand truly I do but you put me in such a predicament. It wasn't fair to Blanche that she had to witness last nights events, she's my sister! she shouldn't of seen that especially coming from you.
Stanley: It's not my fault she hasn't left yet, she's out stayed her welcome!
Stella; Stanley don't be like this please, she's my sister and shes fragile at the moment. I can't just ask her to leave.
Stanley: Yes I know she is, but since she's arrived we haven't had anytime to ourselves and she's interfering in things.
Stella: She cares about me.
Stanley: And I don't?
Stella: Stanley don't be so silly, when I talk to her about last night and reassure her it was an accident she will be fine.
Stanley: Fine! I'm off out with the boys I cant stand to spend a day in here with her!. You look tired go get some rest.
A brave attempt at the scene.
ReplyDeleteThere appears to be a real mixture of tones and therefore some inconsistency in the writing. Stanley's sudden and immediate aggression about Blanche seems at odds with his apology.
Look to draw on the text more and incorporate more of the language and attitudes of the characters. Also, don't be afraid to use stage directions - this is a good area ti explore as it is one of the clearest ways in whicb Williams speaks directly the audience.
ebi check spellings, punctuation and grammar is appropriate.