Algernon and Jack are at the dinner table eating their dinner whilst drinking glasses of wine.
Algernon: I must say Jack this Fish is amazing the taste is to die for!
Jack : hmm yes, it is certainly cooked to perfection
Algernon: Wheres that butler of yours? (shouts) Lane! Lane
Lane: Yes sir, you called?
Algernon: Bring me in another bottle of wine please!
Lane: Yes Sir!
(Lane leaves the room)
Jack: Algernon have you seen it in the local paper!
Algernon: No Jack, I haven't read todays paper!.
Jack: Oh, well in the little village there thinking of opening a new bakery.
Algernon: That would be a nightmare, all little school kids running round the place!
Jack: Hmm yes! You've finished your dinner? Yes! (shouts) Lane!
Lane: Yes SIR!
Jack: Take our dinner, we've finished now!
Algernon: But I'm not...
Jack: Oh that was a lovely evening
(Jack gets up suddenly)
Jack: Is that the time! oh its getting late, I must be getting to bed!
Algernon: Oh um it is rather late Ive outstayed my welcome
Jack: Yes algernon lovely seeing you.
(Sees Algernon to the door )
Lane: Sir I think your friend has forgotten his cigarette case
Jack: Give me that oh how forgetful I shall give it to him next time I see him
www an attempt to write a scene of dialogue with clear characters
ReplyDeleteebi the characterisation needs to be more precise, lane is ALgy's man servant not Jack's...you also don't really make the most of the cigarette case which was after all one of the main features of the scene I wanted you to write.